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Post by Pixx on Jun 22, 2010 20:12:25 GMT -5
(Blogger still isn't letting me comment on this story so...here)
Loved this chapter. LOL those two sound like Karima and me for Alfy *wink*.
I love Uriah's hair too.
I wanna know what Alexis' father knows...I cant wait until you finally write that bit I'll probably explode from anticipation long before...
Maybe you should just tell me and in a PM...I'll give you my lucky penny.
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Post by valpre1983 on Jun 23, 2010 2:13:35 GMT -5
Sorry Pixx, my lips are sealed. You'll know in exactly 6 more chapters. Chapter Thirteen is when all hell breaks loose. Luckily for you Pixx everything is written I just have to take screens for the rest of the chapters which is why the updates have been coming in more frequently  |
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Post by Pixx on Jun 23, 2010 8:38:23 GMT -5
Oh thank heavens...maybe I won't explode after all
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Post by jillyson on Jun 23, 2010 12:33:13 GMT -5
I'm finally caught up! This is wonderful! You're definitely filling in the blanks, and things are making much more sense - hopefully they will soon for Alexis, too! The angel pics of them guarding her were fabulous!!!
were they of both Jared and Uriah?
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Post by holleyberry on Jun 23, 2010 14:04:15 GMT -5
WOW! I am so behind! Argh! Must find more time in a day!
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Post by valpre1983 on Jun 23, 2010 15:06:32 GMT -5
I'm finally caught up! This is wonderful! You're definitely filling in the blanks, and things are making much more sense - hopefully they will soon for Alexis, too! The angel pics of them guarding her were fabulous!!!
were they of both Jared and Uriah?
I'm glad it's all starting to come together. For a while there I was afraid the plot had gotten away from me. I guess that hiatus did me some good. The angel pics was only Uriah  |
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Post by holleyberry on Jun 23, 2010 16:46:33 GMT -5
OK, I'm all caught up! I read all the preludes. Seriously, I don't know why you keep saying the picture quality and storytelling is bad, cause they're not The chapter with Jared and Arianna was so good. You could feel Jared's rage and confusion. I am sure it made it worse when he slept w/ Arianna. Their relationship is interesting to me and I can't wait to see what happens next.
I like how you are mixing vampire lore together too. It sure makes it convenient when you can pick this thing, disregard another, huh? Looks like you did a bit of research.
Argh! I want to slap Jessica upside the head. Sounds like she knew EXACTLY what she was doing when she picked up Alexis' books and dragged her away from Uriah. Maybe foreshadowing a rivalry or something there?
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Post by valpre1983 on Jun 24, 2010 0:46:36 GMT -5
OK, I'm all caught up! I read all the preludes. Seriously, I don't know why you keep saying the picture quality and storytelling is bad, cause they're not The chapter with Jared and Arianna was so good. You could feel Jared's rage and confusion. I am sure it made it worse when he slept w/ Arianna. Their relationship is interesting to me and I can't wait to see what happens next.
I like how you are mixing vampire lore together too. It sure makes it convenient when you can pick this thing, disregard another, huh? Looks like you did a bit of research.
Argh! I want to slap Jessica upside the head. Sounds like she knew EXACTLY what she was doing when she picked up Alexis' books and dragged her away from Uriah. Maybe foreshadowing a rivalry or something there?
Seriously loving this story Val! Can't wait to read more. Thanks Holley, for commenting on blogger too When I started with Fallen I did a bit of research on vampires, fallen angels, etc since I've never written a fantasy/horror story before so I just had to get a few basics right. But yeah, it helps to pick what works for me and leave what doesn't. I love chapter six too. I think maybe it's different when one is born a vampire or has lived with being one for decades, but for someone like Jared, who's human all his life must be confusing and a very scary place. I'm glad his confusion and rage came across okay. Yeah, it will be interesting to see what Alexis and Jessica do on the Uriah issue  |
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Post by valpre1983 on Jul 2, 2010 7:38:18 GMT -5
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Post by jillyson on Jul 2, 2010 11:50:49 GMT -5
Squeee!!!
Val, this is getting so good - everything's starting to come together! I love that Fangtasia shirt on Ariana, by the way!!!
Looks like she's pretty irritated with Jared for making contact - I can't wait to see the fall-out for that!
I love the stuff with Dru and the guys - they finally all make sense to me now! I can't wait to see how THAT turns out, too!
Man...hurry up! More!!!!
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Post by Aussie Karima on Jul 2, 2010 12:08:47 GMT -5
I have read it,but will put of my comment until my head feels OK!Loved it BTW!
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Post by valpre1983 on Jul 2, 2010 12:22:55 GMT -5
Squeee!!!
Val, this is getting so good - everything's starting to come together! I love that Fangtasia shirt on Ariana, by the way!!!
Looks like she's pretty irritated with Jared for making contact - I can't wait to see the fall-out for that!
I love the stuff with Dru and the guys - they finally all make sense to me now! I can't wait to see how THAT turns out, too!
Man...hurry up! More!!!!
Really, I was worried about this chapter, thinking it was vague and I cut out too much again  Yeah, I love Arianna's T too. And BTW, the bar Dru and the guys were at is Merlotte's. I don't know if you guys have it in your games but it looks exactly like the one from True Blood. And I also have Fangtasia. Let me know if you guys want the links, but whoever made these lots is very good ;D And yeah Arianna's not impressed with him for making contact and now that he's determined to get back to Lake Witchyka that will certainly cause some friction on their already strained relationship. |
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Post by jillyson on Jul 2, 2010 12:29:41 GMT -5
OMG, link us up!!!
My "dream" is to finish Sealgaire and completely clear out my old game from my laptop and start fresh. I have so many old, broken, abandoned things in there, I'm sure none of it helps with my horrible load time!
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Post by valpre1983 on Jul 2, 2010 12:40:25 GMT -5
OMG, link us up!!! My "dream" is to finish Sealgaire and completely clear out my old game from my laptop and start fresh. I have so many old, broken, abandoned things in there, I'm sure none of it helps with my horrible load time! Okey dokey Merlottes www.sunni.us/merlottes.htmFangtasia www.sunni.us/fangtasia.htm |
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Post by amylu1988 on Jul 2, 2010 16:06:00 GMT -5
;D Yay! I love these chapters, and once again you just keep getting better. I'm a little incoherent right now as it's been a very long day, but I loved it all and am excited to see where all these new plot points take the story, it's getting so interesting! Nice shots of Jared while he was on the phone too, poor him missing Alexis, I hope Arianna won't be too angry with him for contacting the human world...but then again, she probably will be. |
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