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Post by Aussie Karima on Feb 11, 2009 3:29:39 GMT -5
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Post by Tina ☺ on Feb 12, 2009 8:01:00 GMT -5
Hey Karima, thanks for posting a story thread here!  What we do here though, is post links to our chapters so people can navigate to them quickly and easily. So if you would edit your first post to insert links, that would be awesome.  |
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Post by Pixx on Feb 12, 2009 8:09:39 GMT -5
Daaaaaammmmmmmmnnnnnnn! Hey Karima, are you going to upload those lots? They're off the hook!!!
I know, I was reading Zero-->5 stars by the way-->But I wanted to check your simpage for something and I happened upon your the pics of your houses. The red one is my favorite. Love 'em!
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Post by Tina ☺ on Feb 12, 2009 23:27:24 GMT -5
Karima, I think you have the makings of a very good here. I love your enthusiasm, sincerity and your sense of humor. I think you are a good storyteller, but... there are quite a few ways in which you could improve the 'readability' of your story. I am not going to go into detail though unless you want me too. So... if you would like some honest advice, straight forward advice and tips for improving your writing skills, just say the word. |
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Post by Aussie Karima on Feb 12, 2009 23:42:35 GMT -5
 YES, PLEASE, Tina. As it is my first story, I REALY could use some help, OK !
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Post by Tina ☺ on Feb 12, 2009 23:57:41 GMT -5
You got it! Tomorrow I will come back and show examples of specific areas you need to work on. In the meantime, if you feel like it, you may want to read over the material in the threads posted here. There are links to lots of info intended to help improve our writing skills. Those have been posted as general guidelines, but I'm not sure if many people bother to read them...lol.  You are welcome. I'm always happy to help wherever I can. Tomorrow you will get a detailed critique on the things that need improving, so... I hope you are ready for it. |
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Post by Aussie Karima on Feb 13, 2009 0:43:15 GMT -5
:DThank you so much,Tina, I will be here! OK! |
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Post by Pixx on Feb 13, 2009 9:29:16 GMT -5
Yeah I gave it 5 stars...did I say that yet?
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Post by Aussie Karima on Feb 13, 2009 9:41:45 GMT -5
YEP! you sure did Pixx, thank you, did you re~look at my houses? I put extra shots in just for you, as my red house has been disqualified,then I went in & put back all the extra stuff I took out,I don't think you should have any trouble with it as most of my CC is base game(which means, you do not need any EP's to use them, just the sims2 ) OK, I just have to upload it to megaupload,that's if you still want it? OK. ;D
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Post by Pixx on Feb 13, 2009 11:33:26 GMT -5
Cool! Its uploaded then?
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Post by Tina ☺ on Feb 13, 2009 12:20:47 GMT -5
Hey Karima, I just want to let you know that it may be tomorrow before I am able to give your pointers. I woke up this morning feeling quite groggy, tired, and just plain... blah...lol. My brain is not able to function well enough for this task today, I'm afraid. I'll definitely get to it soon though. |
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Post by Tina ☺ on Feb 16, 2009 15:30:33 GMT -5
Okay Karima, your critique is ready! I didn't want to post it in this thread so go here to read it. |
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Post by §Haily§ on Feb 25, 2009 16:14:26 GMT -5
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!! WHERE DID YOU GET THE REd HEADED GIRL'S HAIR!! THE ONE THAT LIKE NOCKED OVER ZERO!!!!!!! I NEE TO KNOW!!! IT'S AWESOME
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Post by §Haily§ on Feb 25, 2009 16:25:20 GMT -5
Loved it loved it loved it!!! It was amazing Karima! It really was! Despite the bad spelling (i have a bad spelling problem.it runs in my family) and I love Imogen's hair! It's soooo awesome. I have that kind of hair in black,brown,and now blonde but I can't find red like Imogen's and it's makeing me mad! Did I mention that I loved your story...three times? |
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Post by jillyson on Mar 22, 2009 9:23:17 GMT -5
Fabulous story, Karima! And I heart Imogen's hair, too! (as a matter of fact, I love everything about her!) Your simsare gorgeous! Should I start begging for them now? lol! The story is getting really interesting, I can't wait to see what will happen next! Those poor kids, having to live adult lives. Your main characters arevery mature and likable - I'm really rooting for them already!
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