bria
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[M0:0]Always Think Ahead.[ss:Teal Time!]
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Post by bria on Jun 8, 2011 17:53:13 GMT -5
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Post by Aussie Karima on Jun 9, 2011 1:59:46 GMT -5
;D Hi, I tried to get your Prologue but it said page not found, thought I would just tell you so you could fix the link, I did get it by pressing the one underneath!  ~ OK, I can not Comment on Blogger at the moment.......so......
Nice start to this, it is dark,but then that is what you want to convey,is it not? I'm intrigued, so will be back for more!(",) |
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bria
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[M0:0]Always Think Ahead.[ss:Teal Time!]
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Post by bria on Jun 9, 2011 16:30:26 GMT -5
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jillyson
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Twozaks in Other Realms
[M0:6]"Now where have they gone? I seem to have lost my marbles again!" [ss:Luscious Lavender]
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Post by jillyson on Jun 19, 2011 14:32:02 GMT -5
This is a great start! Very intriguing! I just finished ch 2
What an interesting story! There's got to be a bunch of stuff that happened in the past to make this situation the way it is now, and I can't wait to see you unravel it all.
That dream sequence was great - very frightening!
Esteban...maybe wants to be more than employer/employee??? Hmmm... She seems to treat him like a piece of the background, but he seems to be very concerned about her. I can't wait to see where this is going!
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11daisies
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[M0:1]Smile! You Know You Want To![ss:Teal Time!]
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Post by 11daisies on Jun 20, 2011 12:43:13 GMT -5
11daisies said...
This prologue is a beautiful start!
Even without the pictures, I would have been able to see what is happening. You write your descriptions well!
I'm off to read the next chapter.
This is excellent. I don't know how I have missed it. I will definitely be following your story!
I am looking forward to the next chapter.
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