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Post by sweetdreams25 on Mar 18, 2011 10:54:10 GMT -5
The Unknown: Beginning
A quiet little town in Tennessee is under attack. Friends are turning into enemies, love turns into hate. One eventful night two strangers with similar occupations cross paths weaving them into some of their darkest nightmares and fears. The Beginning Part 2
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Post by daijahv on Mar 18, 2011 11:29:55 GMT -5
YES! I'm loving this already! I REALLY REALLY love supernatural and this is agreat start. I love the synopsis and the beginning has already proven poor Crystal is in for a very brutal life as a demon hunter.
My thoughts:
The demons seem to be drawn to her because they know she kills their kind and that's how the one that was killed in her bathroom found her? Or is that the lover of the one she killed?
I am curious how this other hunter got into her place, I assume he was tracking the monster and killed him but there is the possibility that he is following Crystal and is her Knight in Shining Armor (he's hot btw, I LOVE his eyes!)
I am anticipating the next chapter I can't wait to see where this goes!
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Post by qui on Mar 18, 2011 12:16:12 GMT -5
Other than how much I love this I only have one more thing to say that was such a tease! MORE MORE MORE! |
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Post by valpre1983 on Mar 18, 2011 12:26:31 GMT -5
Wow! Incredible beginning. Tell me you're already working on a follow up chapter?
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Post by sweetdreams25 on Mar 18, 2011 12:42:34 GMT -5
thank you ladies  i actually got the idea of this story from one of my favorite shows Supernatural! I'm weak for Sam and Dean...especially Dean. He should be my baby daddy @ Daijah Crystal is no noob when it comes to demon slaying. That had to be some shower if she couldn't even notice a demon coming in tho. lol
He is her knight in armor, but Crystal wont be too happy about that. ahh, but being a tease is fun Qui  Yes ma'am, Freedom. I have the second part already written so all that's left is taking pics. |
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Post by Brianna on Mar 18, 2011 12:57:26 GMT -5
MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! MORE!! ;D Haha I love this!
The summary alone got me hooked.
That was kind of an awkward moment. Random guy walking in while your naked haha.Crystal is one tough cookie! Can't wait for more!! |
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Post by qui on Mar 18, 2011 16:47:53 GMT -5
Not fun or fair! *pouts*
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Post by jillyson on Mar 18, 2011 19:32:05 GMT -5
Wow - right into the action! Now she has to figure out if the new guy is a friend or foe while she's stark nekkid!
That's one way to make friends quick! Lol! Looks like they do have something in common - knowledge on how to kill demons, which I'd think isn't too common.
One helluva start!
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Post by phoenixfg on Mar 20, 2011 14:56:06 GMT -5
SD Supernatural for the WIN!!! *high five* I love this story idea! It was fast and intense and...yeah! Really enjoyed it! Can't wait for more! And you STILL haven't posted a link on LJ! What the what?!  |
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Post by sweetdreams25 on Mar 21, 2011 17:31:09 GMT -5
 lol jilly...thats definitely a way to make some friends REAL quick! thank you, thank you! i only hope i can keep it up cuz this next part is kinda -_- lol *high five!!!* phoenix! like i said just a sec ago...i hope you still like it ._. i had to slow things down just a bit. annnnd i FINALLY got around to posting a link at my LJ. i didn't post a pic or anything yet though because im lazy and sleepy lol
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Post by qui on Mar 21, 2011 18:19:41 GMT -5
OMG We are going to fight... if you don't stop with these cliffhangers! You're only two parts in and I want more of this pair! You're getting me started on a new piece of man candy! I love accents! I mean REALLY love accents and I can hear his so clearly that my heart clenched!!
I lol'ed at him staring at her body! MORE!! |
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Post by daijahv on Mar 21, 2011 18:40:14 GMT -5
Jason is a fox! And he has an ALMOST '67 Chevy Impala ...sigh Dean /fans self!
I loved this! It's great Crystal has someone to work with. I think it'll make hunting less of a chore and more fun since she seems really depressed at times considering what happened to her family, it'll help keep her from thinking about her tragic life.
Jason on the other hand seems spunky and only in it for the kill! I love his humor and good natured attitude. Though he seems to be a bit of a womanizer.
This case sounds interesting, melted internal organs!!! And the police suspect the daughter?! HA! What kind of crackpot detectives they got working in Tennessee? How do they think she did it? LOL! I had to laugh at that one!
I hope she's ok! I was waiting to hear a few shots pop off in that last scene! But then again if it's that dark she might hit Jason. I can't wait to find out what kind of demon they are chasing and what kind he killed in her bathroom because the way he smashed that jeep!!! That monster is packing a punch!
I think Jason and Crystal are going to make an amazing team! I am anxiously awaiting the next chapter!
Great job!
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Post by sweetdreams25 on Mar 21, 2011 19:17:27 GMT -5
lolol don't beat me down Qui! I can't help it! Cliff hangers are so fun lol I love accents too...ESPECIALLY men with southern accents. Let me tell you...instant panty dropper! annd thats tmi  carrying on.. lol We'll be seeing a lot of Jason..maybe even a peek at his naked bod! lol Daijah, I was SO tempted to look for that 67 Impala and use it, but I figured I'm already making my main guy similar to Dean so I probably shouldn't go all the way. Aint Dean just the sexiest eva! *drools*
Since losing her parents, Crystal has adopted more of a hardcore attitude about things. Jason is exactly what she needs to balance herself out and possible return to the way she used to be.
He's definitely the ladies man. You know what...when I wrote the second part I never thought about how or why the police would suspect his step daughter of melting his internal organs O.o *slaps forehead*
Yeah Crystal knows better then to just blindly shoot...or does she??
The demon that attacked her car...well we'll learn about that one further down the road =p
Glad you like the two and the story! Thank you ladies!! |
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Post by qui on Mar 21, 2011 19:29:07 GMT -5
We'll be seeing a lot of Jason..maybe even a peek at his naked bod! lol  |
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Post by daijahv on Mar 21, 2011 19:50:05 GMT -5
LOL Qui! No need to slap your forehead Sweet! I just took it to mean the cops are COMPLETELY clueless about the demonic activity in the town and because of that they continue fighting crime to the best of their abilities which means, suspect the family first! Typical police work! It was really well done! And it made me grateful that there are those that know what is really happening in the town and can help the citizens behind the scenes! And yeah I must agree with Qui, eagerly anticipating Fox's nudes (love his eyes!) |
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