The Bright Side Of Odds

[Lextreme]

Hey, So I wanted to create and get some things out straight from my mind and decided to do a series of chapters involving teenagers, The Main plot involves three teenagers that move to another city to stay in a boardingschool and they have to stay with a relative before going to the school, each one of their relatives is sort of ''mad'', so to speak, and has certain issues in her/his life. In chapter one we meet the first main character, and her aunt and let's just say that her aunt, has some craziness in her life. I think the 2nd chpt will be up between 10-13 of november

thesims2.ea.com/exchange/story_detail.php?asset_id=243666

There's the link
And I would really appreciate some feedback, and your opinions

Ohhh one last thing
Don't forget to rate only if you really liked the story

THANKS!
-Lt

[Tina ☺]

Hey Lex! I'm SO sorry I haven't commented in here sooner, but I've been trying to catch up on other obligations that were in line first... First I would like to say thank you so much for joining the community and posting the link to your story here!

I have a question for you: Is English your second language? I ask this because I noticed quite a bit of mixing around of certain words in your story which makes it a bit difficult to read. It makes me have to concentrate really hard to understand what's going on.

There's also quite a few run-on sentences as well as incomplete sentences (phrases which end with a period), and quite a few typos in the mix. Like I said in your guest book when I first read your stories, I am VERY impressed with your improvement between the two writings. It shows a real desire for improvement, (which none of us are above needing...lol)

That said, I would be more than happy to offer my proof reading services to you for your next chapter if you want. I am always willing to help a fellow writer/simmer/community member learn ways in which to improve their skills.

Keep simming, keep writing, and keep having fun!

[Pixx]

OMG it's long!!!!

But I loved it and I bookmarked it
I have a weird obsession with long stories lol