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Post by joandsarah on Mar 11, 2009 23:42:59 GMT -5
The stupid power went out because they wet something grrr. Now I forgot what I had.  Any way I mentioned your Elvis pictures...oh yes and a mistake..if you want to know. It's in a photo though. I think I'm about half way but I have to get it up again. Tyler has the same hair as Frank ;D If you know who that is...my youngest child in larks story. ;D Hey there's a laugh in Tina's story! Even if it is from grrr Louis. Ellie seriously that girl needs to see a shrink ASAP. I think I'm in a funny mood because I see some humor in that situation with Ellie who I think is more warped then Louis. You and your cliff hangers! Man you better not be planning on two months with an ending like that Tina, or I'll come over and hound you...once I can afford a leer jet.  Great chapter Oh yes yawn.  No it was terrific, actually I think it was better then chapter 8. |
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 11, 2009 23:51:40 GMT -5
You mentioned the Elvis pictures, where?  And... of COURSE I want to know if you've found a mistake! Crissy read it and found some, then I read it again and found some... now it's y'all's turn to find more and you know me... I GOTTA fix those mistakes! ;D |
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Post by holleyberry on Mar 11, 2009 23:57:28 GMT -5
WooHoo!
Off to read! Be right back!
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Post by joandsarah on Mar 12, 2009 0:06:35 GMT -5
Tina I added more to my post above. I thought you had Elvis on purpose.  About page 56. The mistake is you have Jeremy in day clothes when he should be in jammies. Same shot as Elvis. Jeremy is going to be tucked back into bed but he's wearing shorts and sandals. I certainly never see any mistakes with your writing, it's brilliant. |
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 12, 2009 0:10:02 GMT -5
Hey, thanks for the comments Jo! I'm glad you liked the story. ;D Now... where is the mistake I made, Woman? It's in a photo? Which one? Oh and... Ellie's scene was very fun for me to write.  EDIT: Oh, I see...lol! Well, he's in clothes because my toddlers ALWAYS are wearing clothes. I didn't think about that for the story..lol. I always have them use the toddler blanket to sleep and they stay in clothes all the time. I HATE the way game puts them in jammies for the crib and even when you bathe them, they go back into their jammies. I never remembered to change them into clothes so they were always in their stupid jammies.. Ah well, at least my writing was good for you. Thanks again! ;D
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Post by joandsarah on Mar 12, 2009 0:11:29 GMT -5
This is a hugly scattered reply and I have modified both posts now. |
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 12, 2009 0:33:54 GMT -5
Cut that out! You're confusing me...  I modified my post too...lol Well, I was trying to wait up for Holley's reaction to the story, but she must have gotten lost. My eyes are getting really fuzzy, so I'm going to bed now. It's after 1:30am here... ack! I hope more folks read and actually like my story. Remember Holley, I'm reading yours in the morning with my coffee. ;D |
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Post by holleyberry on Mar 12, 2009 0:35:46 GMT -5
Great Chapter Tina! I am glad we saw more of Thomas. We have been missing him the last couple of chapters. I am glad he has been helping. I am glad Shannon and... I can't remember the husbands name right now, are "better"Poor Donovan still sick. And Gabriella is a TOTAL BEOTCH!
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 12, 2009 0:41:08 GMT -5
Yay! I got to hear from you before bed after all! ;D Oh yea, this was sort of a 'Jilly chapter'. She requested more Thomas and I found a way to give it to her. Thanks Holley! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! ;D |
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Post by holleyberry on Mar 12, 2009 0:48:24 GMT -5
I like Thomas too, so it was a bonus for me as well. BTW, My God it's like 2AM there woman. Go to bed! ;D Can't wait to hear from you on mine as well. Your pictures turned out good I think. |
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Post by jillyson on Mar 12, 2009 7:28:19 GMT -5
*Dancing with glee* WOW!!! That was AWESOME!!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE what you did with Thomas - not just for obvious reasons, but it was very true to his character and his feelings for Shannon right from the start. And that cliffhanger??? Holy Cow! PLEASE tell me we won't have to wait too long to see what happens there!!! The expressions in those pictures were absolutely perfect! I've got to hop in the tub - I have a vacation day for dr. appointments, so I was able to catch this post. For this, I would've gladly been late to work! Lol!
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 12, 2009 7:50:51 GMT -5
Glad you enjoyed Jilly! ;D I was very worried that it was going to be too long and get boring, but I'm satisfied and happy now that people are enjoying it. ;D Well Holley, I guess there are more Thomas fans than I knew... |
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Post by maegnas on Mar 12, 2009 13:54:01 GMT -5
OMG she is so evil! I still don't like her though but gosh she is bad! The story was amazing!!! I really loved it, as always I admit I didn't see the thing with thomas coming. I didn't think it was him good story, no AMAZING story |
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Post by Tina ☺ on Mar 12, 2009 14:04:33 GMT -5
;D Glad you enjoyed it, Mae! So... what do you REALLY think? I racked my brain to figure out a way to have the shadow after Shannon while holding back who it was until later. So I was hoping separating the parts like that would work. I guess it did...lol. I was thinking, and hoping, people would think the cloaked figure was Louis in the beginning. |
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Post by maegnas on Mar 12, 2009 14:15:33 GMT -5
okay,  I have to find how that spoiler thing works out : oh look at that a black not smiley face hehe Okay I thought at first the shadow must be Louis or Stephen, but I didn't think it was Stephen that much because I don't remember seeing him THAT obsessed over Shannon. And I have to admit I "hate" you for leaving us on a cliffhanger like that!! (hating in a good way or course ) And of course the atmosphere and tension is incredible! It's easy to relate to at least one character You are a fantastic writer and again I can't wait for the rest. And honestly I think this was worth the wait, because it is excellent |
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