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Post by mercifulplay on Oct 27, 2008 17:37:51 GMT -5
A Walk Along The Beach
I walk along the beach, a rose in my hand
pain in my heart, feet in the sand
storm clouds above, face to the sky
head full of questions, wondering why
visions of the past, flooding my mind
memories rekindle, love we left behind.
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Post by lyse328 on Oct 27, 2008 17:42:46 GMT -5
You really are good at this- something about your words is intriguing. Good work! May we see more?   Sorry, I had to move this. (It was in the Non-exchange story section) |
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Post by mercifulplay on Oct 27, 2008 17:50:54 GMT -5
That's okay. I don't mind you moving it. Sometimes I get mixed up and post things in the wrong place because I don't know where they go (not that I mean to do it).
Thanks for your compliments and feedback on my poems.
Merci...
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Tina ☺
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Chillin'
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Post by Tina ☺ on Oct 27, 2008 18:00:17 GMT -5
Awesome! This one is quite sorrowful and beautiful. Very nice work. Thanks so much for sharing your beautiful words with us!  |
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Post by mercifulplay on Oct 27, 2008 18:02:03 GMT -5
Thank YOU...Tina
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storyfan
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Popping in and out.[ss:Black/Purple]
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Post by storyfan on Nov 11, 2008 15:00:17 GMT -5
Wow! Very powerful. I like it a lot!
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Post by mercifulplay on Nov 12, 2008 20:10:46 GMT -5
Thanks Storyfan (I like your name).
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jillyson
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Twozaks in Other Realms
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Post by jillyson on Nov 15, 2008 0:50:42 GMT -5
Really vivid, Merci! I felt like I was there! Thanks for posting it!
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Post by mercifulplay on Nov 17, 2008 23:07:35 GMT -5
Thanks JILLY!!!
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Kittielove
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Post by Kittielove on Nov 28, 2008 17:18:04 GMT -5
Love the rhythm and rhyme.
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Post by mercifulplay on Dec 1, 2008 20:31:47 GMT -5
Thanks KITTIE!!!
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Marie
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Post by Marie on Dec 2, 2008 16:30:22 GMT -5
It's really good! You should write more. |
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Post by mercifulplay on Dec 18, 2008 18:35:06 GMT -5
sorry for not responding sooner-I'm working on writing more, but poetry comes to me by spells only.
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